An excerpt from a story I'm working on. I would appreciate your thoughts ... but be kind.
Introduction:
Those
who followed the Prophets could never quite understand that Jesus was
the fulfillment of the very prophecies they gave! Born the only son
of the Creator, he was the door that opened out from a life of
nothingness and damnation and onto a life of Grace, forgiveness and
joy. Such is as it had been since the earliest days and was so now.
Two schools of belief existed on Erets: The teachings of the
Prophets (unfulfilled) and the teachings of Jesus (fulfilled
prophecies). True, there were those who followed other paths, even
those who claimed to follow no path at all ...but even small children
understood that in order to follow no path at all, you were in
essence following a path. Even if it was a path to avoid all the
other paths. But such were the claims of the people who'd gathered
on the steps of the Great Temple. The news had gone out that the
Great Commission was coming to its final phase, that having reached
all of Erets, the next step was to reach out to the stars.
And
so we begin:
It
had been long believed that on the many little lights visible in the
night sky that God had created worlds where other races lived.
People such as the citizens of this world, maybe even people who knew
of the God of Heaven and Erets. But such was a leap of Faith that
many did not wish to take. “Leave the heavens to God, we have
enough issues to deal with here.”
The
crowds milling on the Temple steps were a diverse group. Physicians,
lawyers, common laborers, skilled tradesmen … even students and
housewives were there. Far up in the Temple tower, Pahr stood,
looking down at the scene below. This had been a long day for him.
The Temple gates were locked tightly, fearing a rush of protesters
wanting to force their way into the Temple Gardens shouting for an
audience with the Council. Some on the Council still followed the
Prophets, though more and more were siding with those following
Jesus. The Jesuine councilors, Pahr included, presently held the
majority of the seats on the Council. As such it fell to them to
choose the path that the Council would follow during their tenure.
Many
years prior, the government of Erets had been established. Following
the traditions of the Prophets, the council had been established with
council members being considered Judges. Much of this history was
running through Pahr's mind as he watched the crowds below. His
revelry did not last long however as his personal comm crackled to
life with the voice of his wife Clariss, “Pahr, should the guards
disburse this crowd or do you even see what is going on?” Inwardly
Pahr sighed. In so many ways, Clariss was the perfect mate for him,
but on rare occasions like this she almost seemed to think less of
his ability to even recognize what was going on.
“Not
to worry Clariss. The guards have assured me that the gates are more
than up to the task of a crowd twice as big as this. We are safe
here.”
“But
what if they were to force the gate? What if they brought explosives
or cutting tools?”
Looking
down through his window, Pahr acknowledged that that would indeed be
a problem. He however also knew that there was sensory equipment
installed in every possible hiding place throughout the Temple
complex that would reveal the presence of any substance or tool that
could potentially be used against either the Temple or its
inhabitants. The system, nicknamed “Samson” had been installed
over the years, with additions and revisions made as technology
brought new options to the fore.
“Not
to worry dearest. Samson is watching. We shall be fine.” A small
chuckle could be heard through the his ear piece as Clariss
responded, “I sure wish you'd put as much trust in me as you do in
that machine.” Clariss' aversion to just about anything
mechanical, let alone computerized was a trait Pahr had always
considered endearing. He had to admit however that occasionally it
was somewhat frustrating. But he reasoned, he was sure he wasn't
always a barrel of fun to deal with either.